Some people believe that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crimes. Others believe that it is not morally correct to kill criminals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
At present
era
death penalty is Correct your spelling
the
anti
against whether to have or not. In Correct word choice
apply
this
essay
I am going to discuss both the points and Add a comma
essay,
then
explain why I believe.
Firstly
there are people
who argue that the benefits of killing of
criminals considerably outweigh its Change preposition
apply
advantage
. The main reason for believing that Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
this
is some special cases like committing rap on toddlers, that is
not at all acceptable and people
expect immediate justice
, in such
scenario
, I strongly believe that Correct article usage
a scenario
death
penalty is the appropriate Correct article usage
the death
justice
for it. Example
I have read news in the Change preposition
For example
news paper
four guys Correct your spelling
newspaper
are
attempted Unnecessary verb
apply
rap
on six years Fix the infinitive
to rap
old
girl, the government found those guys and the final Correct your spelling
six-year-old
justice
was death.
On the other
hand
others believe that, if any crime Add a comma
hand,
is happened
Change to the active voice
happens
has happened
people
say that, criminals should be given time to counsel him
to change, some kind of Correct pronoun usage
apply
therapies
, should be investigated, why they have Fix the agreement mistake
therapy
done
, what initiated them to do Correct pronoun usage
done it
this activities
and should take preventive measures, so that similar incidents will not Change the determiner
this activity
these activities
takes
place again, punishing the criminal not only gives the solution it is responsible to take preventive measures is more appropriate. Change the verb form
take
Example
educating the Change preposition
For example
people
from the school itself about etiquette to
boys and, Change preposition
for
also
providing self defence
technic to all the girls.
In Add a hyphen
self-defence
conclusion
I believe both arguments have their merits. Add a comma
conclusion,
However
I believe that immediate Add a comma
However,
justice
always satisfy
the victim.Change the verb form
satisfies
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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