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The graph below shows the average number of years of education, by country between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of years of education, by country between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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general
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the general
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 amount of
years
 spent on educational purposes by
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 respectively in two different countries, New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 and Korea.
Data
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The data
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 given above covers the span of 60
years
, starting in 1950 and taking the end in 2010.
Overal
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, it can be clearly seen that all indicators showed an increasing trend throughout the decades in each country for both genders. In 1950
average
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the average
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 number of
years
 spent on education in Korea
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 composed
3
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and 5
years
 for females and males in the order given, demonstrating a steady increase and reaching the point of 11 and 12
years
 in 2010. Taking into consideration information about New
Zeland
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Zealand
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,
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the indicators
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 in
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the graph
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also
mantained
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maintained
 an
overal
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overall
grow
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, with man starting with a number of 8
years
 in 1950 and ending up with 12
years
 in 60
years
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60-year
 period. The duration of women's education, in turn, increased from 7.5
years
 to almost 12 in 1990, but
then
tendency
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the tendency
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 showed a slight decrease with female education lasting in general for 11
years
 in the year 2010.
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