The diagram below shows the process of producing edible oils and fats, and margarine. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The diagram shows how edible
fats
and oils
are made and shows all the stages involved, from collecting the raw materials
to producing the oils
and fats
. There are nine stages in this
process, which will be outlined below.
Firstly
, the raw materials
, such
as sunflowers, palm oil
and nuts, are collected and transported by ship to a silo. At this
point the raw materials
are crushed and milled in order to extract the oil
, then
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and then
materials
are pressed. The next stage is refining. At this
stage
the Add a comma
stage,
oils
are then
filtered and steamed. It is at this
point that the oils
become edible. Different oils
are made from this
process, examples of which are coconut oil
, sunflower oil
and refined oils
. These are used to make edible oils
and fats
which are then
transported to supermarkets and shops to be sold.
Overall
, the process of making edible oils
and fats
largely entails cleaning and purifying in order for the oils
to be fit for human consumption or further
manufacturing processes.Submitted by lenochkapopovich on
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