Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others contest those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion
In some countries, the
governments
do not place importance on observing and controlling the design and costructions
of homes and apartments. Correct your spelling
construction
constructions
Thus
the buildings were designed and structured by only Correct article usage
the owners
owners
Change noun form
owners'
owner's
decision
. I believe that Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
the
Correct article usage
apply
governments
should introduce strict rules for such
important decisions.
On the one hand, some of the owners might do
not consider all of the necessary conditionsUnnecessary verb
apply
,
and only think about making money. There are several matters that they should consider. Remove the comma
apply
Firstly
, For the safety of the residents, they must use the
Correct article usage
apply
high
Add a hyphen
high-quality
quality
materials, especially, in the base of structure
. Add an article
the structure
Secondly
, the designers should pay attention to shape
of all of the buildings in the whole Add an article
the shape
neighborhood
and their design should not Change the spelling
neighbourhood
be
vary from other houses. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
, in a cultural area, a modern skyscraper would make a bad impression.
On the other hand
, I believe that the governments
are responsible for this
issue. They can recruit some experts in city
designing
and introduce effective rules. The owner not only can make a Replace the word
design
high
Add a hyphen
high-quality
quality
building but also
make the relevant decisions.
It is very important that all of the buildings of a city
have the same quality
and have
Unnecessary verb
apply
a
harmony. Remove the article
apply
Otherwise
, the city
has become odd and ugly.
In concolusio
, I believe it is the Correct your spelling
conclusion
governments
responsibility Change to a genitive case
government's
governments'
for controlling
the design and structure of new houses and make the Change preposition
to control
city
more convinient
for their citizens. Correct your spelling
convenient
Additionally
, they should observe the quality
of materials for the safety of residents. In this
case
we could live in a better Add a comma
case,
city
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