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The tabel illustrate the information about the average annual expense of university students in three different countries.

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The given table illustrates the information
of
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average
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the average
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 annual expenditure of university
students
 in three different countries.
Overall
, it is clear from the table that
students
 mostly spend on accommodation and food from their living costs, and they spend less on books and other sorts of expenses. For accommodation, the
students
 of
country
 A and
country
B
 spend around 45% and 35% of their
income
 respectively.
While
country
C
 spends a lower amount of money on accommodation which is 35% of their
income
.
However
,
country
C
students
spends
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 around 36% of their
income
 on food which is higher than
the
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country
 A and
country
B
. The
students
 of
country
C
 spend around 21% of their
income
 on buying books
while
 the
students
 of
country
B
 and
country
 A only spend 9% and 3% respectively. For leisure, the
students
 of
country
 A and
country
B
 spend 22% and 23 % of their
income
while
 the
students
 of
country
C
 spend only 12% of their
income
. For other expenses,
country
 A and
country
B
students
 spend 8% and 5% respectively, and the
country
C
students
 only spend approximately 1%.
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