some cities , public parks and pen spaces changed to garden for local people to grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do you think is benefits more than disantages?

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to change the public parks and open areas to gardens , let
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can
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grow
the
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food
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,
such
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as
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fruit
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fruits

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and
vegetables
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. I think
this
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idea will cause out great benefit than the disadvantages. For the first
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, it can be more health. The local
people
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can choose the positive way to grow their own
fruit
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and
vegetables
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, adding
the
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apply

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healthy fertiliser, like
the
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eggshells and great soil.
Reduse
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Reduce

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the worry about the
food
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are
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is

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adding some bad elements for
grow
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growth

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which are selling outside.
Second
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The second

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point
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, it can be more suitable
to
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people
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.
People
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can choose to grow what kind of
fruit
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and
vegetables
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, it can link to their
hobits
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habits

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and favour.
Such
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as the sports
peolpe
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people

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can grow some
vegetables
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and
fruit
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for making
joices
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juices
juice

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and
salas
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sales
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, growing
strewberries
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strawberries

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who love it.
Poeple
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People

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can have more
chose
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choices

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to choose
.
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Third
point
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, it can earn money by selling
own
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its own

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grow
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apply

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fruit
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and
vegetables
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. After the
fruit
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and
vegetables
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are
grew
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grown

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, the local
people
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can sell them to each other and even the visitors.
Make
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Take

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a
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an

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example from
china
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China

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, some
poeple
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people

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will sell their own
grow
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goods
at
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in

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the centre of the city,
such
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as near the market,
those
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and those

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produces
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produce

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will be
more
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apply

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cheaper than the
produces
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produce

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sell
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sold

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at the shopping market. And the
sell
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selling

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point
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is ' organic own grow
vegetables
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and
fruit
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'. The
last
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point
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is local
people
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can eat
the
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fresh
friut
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fruit
fruits

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and
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by getting
at
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to

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their gardens. They can get the
food
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when they want to eat.
Because sometimes
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Sometimes

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we put the
fruit
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and
vegetables
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at home for a long time after
bougth
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buying

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them, the reason is ready the
food
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frist
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first

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for
futher
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further

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want to eat and can buy it. To sum
of
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up of

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above points, we can see that it
bring
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brings

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out many advantages, are benefit
the
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people
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's daily
live
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lives

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. They can eat the fresh
fruit
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and
vegrtables
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vegetables

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which are growing.

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The essay addresses the prompt thoroughly by discussing both the benefits and disadvantages of gardens in public parks.
coherence cohesion
The essay is organized with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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There is a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the essay well.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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