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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart represents the fluctuating
house
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prices
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 in five cities from 1990 and 1995 compared with the
prices
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 from 1996 to 2002.
First,
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there were two opposite trends in the
house
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prices
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 in the four big cities. In 1990, Tokyo and London's
house
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prices
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 changed the most as they went down by 6% from the normal price. New York houses'
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 declined by 5%.
However
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, Madrid and Frankfurt had an increase because Madrid's
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 had a rise of 2%,
while
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 Frankfurt had risen by 3%. From 1996 to 2002, the average of
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prices
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 were increasing. London’s
prices
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 sharply went up to 12%, followed by New York’s with a rise of 5%, and Madrid’s 4%. Meanwhile, Frankfurt’s
prices
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 had declined by 1% compared to a decade before.
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, in Tokyo, it was still below average with a percentage of 5%.
To sum up
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,
house
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prices
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 tended to decline before encountering a significant increase in
house
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prices
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 from 1996 to 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words house, prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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