In the age of digital communication and social media,face-to-face interactions are becoming less common.Some people think that this is decreasing people's ability to communicate well in person. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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in
internet
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have formed a lot of social media
plaforms
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platforms
for
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people
to interact
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However
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people
consider these as
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since these can affect the communication of
people
when they meet someone,
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in person
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.
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I disagree with
this
statement and I will discuss reasons for
this
in upcoming paragraphs. First of all, yes, there may be some cases in which
people
might
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that they are
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difficult
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time talking to someone in front of them because they are spending more time on
internet
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and community sites.
For example
,
this
has happened in only 1% of
people
according to
reports and with the ones, who were found exploring forums for extensive hours
that is
much more than normal.
Therefore
, it should be noted that regular usage is fine but extended hours for long
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of time consistently would definitely cause some major issues regarding communication.
Secondly
, socializing has become
more easy
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with the help of these
interacting
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forums,
people
can
easliy
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easily
make more friends from different
part
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parts
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of
world
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and can meet them
for exploring
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more.
Thus
, it might feel awkward at first and there are chances that an individual might stammer that could be because of
first
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encounter not because of more socializing on
internet
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the internet
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.
For instance
, my friend, whom I met
last
year was fumbling but later she got quite comfortable and she speaks well now.
To conclude
, there may be minor issues with conversations that are normal even with
people
who are not even using community sites.
Furthermore
, only connecting it to
digitial
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digital
communication is not right.
Therefore
, it is wrong to say that online
coversations
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conversations
are
cause
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the cause
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of
failure
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the failure
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of face-to-face
coversation
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conversation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital communication
  • social media
  • face-to-face interactions
  • non-verbal cues
  • emotional intelligence
  • active listening
  • body language
  • facial expressions
  • tone of voice
  • nuanced communication
  • empathy
  • emotional responses
  • geographical barriers
  • misunderstandings
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