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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main incidents and make comparisons where relavent.

#information #incidents #comparisons #relavent
The bar graph illustrates the
hours
 of
leisure
time
 in a typical
week
spend
Wrong verb form
spent
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people
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by people
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according to
 their employment status and sex from the year 1998 to 1999.
Overall
, it is clear from the bar graph that unemployed and retired persons spent the highest
hours
 of
leisure
time
 and
full
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full-time
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time
 employed persons used the lowest amount of
leisure
period
. Both unemployed and retired males spent around 82
hours
 of
leisure
period
while
 unemployed and retired females
spend
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spent
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 around 80
hours
 of
leisuire
Correct your spelling
leisure
period
 in a
week
.
Moreover
,
full
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full-time
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time
 employed males spent 45
hours
 of
leisure
period
while
full
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full-time
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time
 employed females spent approximately 38
hours
 of
leisure
period
 in a
week
. Males who are
part
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part-time
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time
 employed
spent
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spend
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 around 41
hours
 of
leisure
period
 in a
week
. Housewives spent around 55
hours
 of
leisure
period
.
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introduction conclusion present
Provide a brief conclusion to round off the summary.
relevant specific examples
Use specific data from the graph to make more precise comparisons.
logical structure
The structure of the essay is logical and follows a clear progression from an overview to specific details.
clear comprehensive ideas
Main points regarding leisure time differences based on employment status are clearly articulated.

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