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Band 2

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main incidents and make comparisons where relavent.

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The bar graph illustrates the
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leisure
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time
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 in a typical
week
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spend
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people
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according to
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 their employment status and sex from the year 1998 to 1999.
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, it is clear from the bar graph that unemployed and retired persons spent the highest
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leisure
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time
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full
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 employed persons used the lowest amount of
leisure
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period
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. Both unemployed and retired males spent around 82
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leisure
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 unemployed and retired females
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 around 80
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leisuire
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leisure
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week
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 employed males spent 45
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leisure
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full
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 employed females spent approximately 38
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leisure
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. Males who are
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 employed
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 around 41
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leisure
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. Housewives spent around 55
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introduction conclusion present
Provide a brief conclusion to round off the summary.
relevant specific examples
Use specific data from the graph to make more precise comparisons.
logical structure
The structure of the essay is logical and follows a clear progression from an overview to specific details.
clear comprehensive ideas
Main points regarding leisure time differences based on employment status are clearly articulated.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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