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Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more excercise and spend more time with their family and friends whereas now many suffer loneliness and health problems.What are the causes o this and what are some solutions

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Nowadays, loneliness and health
issues
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 are common phenomena which were different in the past.
This
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 essay will suggest the principal causes of these
issues
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 and submit some government
awareness
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 programs as viable solutions, followed by a reasoned conclusion. The main cause of the health
issues
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 is nothing but poor
diet
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. At present, most
people
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 live on junk foods which has a very bad impact on the human body.
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, alcohol and drugs have no restrictions in most countries. Specifically, many European countries have withdrawn the ban on weeds. If I talk about junk food, there is a good
example
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,
such
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 as the "WALE" movie. It draws the viewer's attention, especially to the obesity level of the mass
people
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 in the giant spaceship who don't work but only take junk foods and enjoy entertainment on the display in front of them.
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, young and middle-aged
people
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 love to hang out with friends rather than family. Cafeterias, bars, pubs, tea shops etc are visible in every corner of the road.
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, family members are always busy on their smartphones at home which makes them more lonelier.
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example
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, the movie "Eye Shoot" demonstrated the result of spending most of the time on the Internet.
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, couples don't want to have a baby because of increasing expenses and lack of
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, which make them purposeless in old age. For the possible causes of these
issues
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, a massive government-sponsored
awareness
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 campaign will be effective regarding the "dangers of poor
diet
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". These will lead the
people
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 to healthier food habits.
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example
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, the Indian government already has launched several programs on
diet
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awareness
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.
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,
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 kind of campaign will
also
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 help the couple to understand the need to have a baby,
also
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 government can provide incentives for having every child.
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, Italy announced
such
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 kind of program
last
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 year in 2022. In conclusion, the current health crisis has been caused by an unhealthy
diet
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 and a lack of
awareness
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.
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, loneliness has been affected by the bad use of technology and lack of
awareness
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. States should take care of these
issues
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 by initiating some big programs.
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task achievement
Although the essay presents the overall ideas required by the task, it is important to ensure that the response directly addresses the question of why older people were happier and healthier in the past and why this has changed, as well as offering specific solutions. Focus on directly answering the question with clear and directly relevant ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear progression of ideas throughout the essay. Your paragraphs should be well-organized, with clear topic sentences that introduce the main idea of each paragraph, and subsequent sentences should develop this idea with explanations and examples.

Your opinion

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