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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata.

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The graph compares the information about average monthly
temperature
 and precipitation in Kolkata.
It is clear that
 the number of rainfall
is
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increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 forward trend from Jan to
Jul
, which climbed to its peak at approximately 340mm. There are four
month
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months
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 are the
most
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apply
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highest amount of precipitation during the whole year, which are Jun,
Jul
, Aug, and Sep. The lowest figure
of
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 rainfall is in
Dec
, at about 10mm.
In contrast
, the number of rainfall is
decline
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declining
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 forward trend from
Jul
 to
Dec
. It is noticeable that the figure in
Jul
 is almost 34 times more than it
in
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was in
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Dec
. A closer examination of the data, we can infer that the
temperature
 in Kolkata
lower
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 than 30 degrees over the whole year. There is the lowest figure
of
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for
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temperature
 in Jan and
Dec
, both with about 20 degrees.
By contrast
, the highest number of
temperature
 occur in Mar, Apr, May, and Jun, which are approximately 30 degrees.
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coherence cohesion
To strengthen the logical flow, consider using sequencing words more effectively. This will help in smoothly transitioning between different elements of your analysis.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear conclusion. Including one will enhance the structure and provide a more comprehensive response.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and comparisons from the climograph to support your points about temperature patterns.
task achievement
Work on sentence structure to express ideas more clearly and avoid ambiguity.
task achievement
The essay gives a good comparative view of rainfall changes across different months, which shows good analytical skills.
coherence cohesion
The introduction effectively identifies the main components shown in the climograph, which sets a clear stage for detailed discussion.

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