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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table compares the amount of money that people spent on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment in five Europe
countries
. There is a significant difference in the percentages of spending money among
countries
. The most considerable point is that
,
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apply
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the Uk's
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Uk's
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UK's
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 residents had spent the highest amount of money on housing, in comparison to their other needs and other
countries
. The other noticeable point is
France
 had spent the lowest portion in most of the sections.
According to
 the table, housing
expenses
 were the highest portion of their income among most
countries
, accounting for almost 31% to 37%, except for Turkey and Spain. Their highest
expenses
 were food and drink at around 36 and 31%,
while
 it was the second place in
France
, Germany, and
UK
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the UK
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, accounting for 25%, 27%, and 22% respectively. Clothing and entertainment
expenses
 are at the same percentage in
France
 at around 11%,
while
 in other
countries
 were totally different. In
France
 and
Spain
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Spain,
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 the entertainment
expenses
 were almost 7
percent
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per cent
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 higher than in clothing ,
while
 in Germany and Espain were completely
opposite
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the opposite
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.
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