The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

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table

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rates of police

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sources in Britain, between 2017-2018 in

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the second charts below show how it was

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, each of 2017 and 2018. Their budgets are around 175.5m- 178.0.m

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. Local Taxes follow behind of National Government. The rate of 2017

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up to 102.3m. Before the 2018, it was 91.2m.

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2017 to 2018.

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Britain’s budget in the essay.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words table with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 6 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

budget allocation
funding sources
government policies
economic conditions
community services
crime prevention
public safety
significant increase/decrease
distribution
assessment
reflection
allocation shifts
budget comparison
impact analysis

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