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Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features

Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The line graph compares the
tonnes
 of garbage,which was
manufacturured
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manufactured
 by three different countries during the years
of
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2000 to 2015.
Overall
, it can be seen that with the passage of time, both Blue and Green Companies reduced their rubbish,
while
 that was inclined by Orange
Company
.
To begin
 with,the Blue
Company
 stood at
maximum
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the maximum
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 amount of litter manufacturing with 12
tonnes
,
whereas
 the other two
oraganizations
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organisations
begun
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 with just below 10
tonnes
.
Furthermore
,the Green
Company
 experienced a
steadily increased
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 of that
of
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to approximately 10
tonnes
 in the year 2005,before
hit
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 a law of 3
tonnes
 in 2015.
In addition
,
dramati
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dramatic
colapsed
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collapsed
collapse
 was witnessed by the Blue Co-operation,which plunged to 9
tonnes
 in
the
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2015.In comparison,the Blue
Company
prouduced
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produced
 more
dump
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 than 6
tonnes
, compared to the team Green in the year 2015.
In contrast
.Orange
Company
 had a drastic growth in the time period.It started at nearly
at
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4
tonnes
 of rubbish and dramatically increased
closely
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 to 10
tonnes
.
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