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The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The pie chart illustrates the seven types of spending (food,
cars
, petrol,
restaurants
, furniture, computers, and
books
) in 1996 by American citizens.
Overall
, the largest
proportion
 was
cars
. the second biggest
proportion
 was
foods
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food
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 and
restaurants
. The third largest
proportion
 was computers.
In contrast
, the smallest ratio
was
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was booked
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books
. On the one hand, the ratio of
cars
 made up at around 45% which was more than foods and
restaurants
 at about 31% and more than
computures
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computers
 at around 35% in 1996. The second largest was
foods
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food
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 and
restaurants
. It remained roughly 14% in both
category
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 which was less than
cars
 at around 31%.
Moreover
, the
proportion
 of computers stayed at approximately 10% which is less than
cars
 at around 35%.
On the other hand
, the ratio of petrol and furniture comprised approximately 8% which was greater than
books
 at about 7%. The smallest
proportion
 was
books
 which stood at below 2%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, restaurants, books, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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