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Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Severe social consequences can be caused by a shortage of housing in large urban areas. A number of individuals hold the view that only
government
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 action can solve
this
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 issue. I agree to a certain extent with the statement given. Throughout the following paragraphs, not only
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 tackle but
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 both public and private sectors
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will be examined. On the one
hands
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, it is undeniable that there are a variety of benefits
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associated
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government
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. The primary and crucial one is that
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 can create policies to control
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 problem.
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 is
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 the fact that the
government
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 is a
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contributor
 to
oraganizing
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organising
 experts to find a way out.
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 can improve infrastructure
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 as public transport,
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hospitals
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, and
mall
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malls
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to cover all areas, which results in individuals having more
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 to stay.
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 can create zoning laws that covert land into residential areas.
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,
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 there are
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numerous resolutions of
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 action, private sector involvement should be well-considered. The initial and most obvious one is that the private sector can
also
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 play a significant role.
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, private companies can collaborate with public sectors to decrease the price of housing.
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, public-private partnerships can work together to create affordable housing projects that lead to housing more sufficiently. In conclusion, even though there are beneficial aspects of public-private partnerships, I hold the view that
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 of acting by
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 outweigh them. If the
government
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 tackles
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 problem, it is almost
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certain
 that
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 will solve the problem sustainably.

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task achievement
Expand upon the contradiction between government action and private sector involvement to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph fully connects to and supports your thesis statement.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly outlines the argument you intend to examine, providing a solid foundation for the essay.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes your argument and reinforces your viewpoint, providing a clear ending to the essay.
logical structure
Each paragraph maintains a clear focus, contributing to an overall logical flow within the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban planning
  • policies
  • funding
  • private sector
  • community organizations
  • public-private partnerships
  • innovative solutions
  • market demands
  • financially viable
  • socioeconomic factors
  • income inequality
  • migration
  • urbanization
  • concerted efforts
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