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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008.
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The table shows student enrollment trends at Bristol University in 1928, 1958, and 2008, focusing on student numbers, gender distribution, local enrollment, and international diversity. In 1928, the university enrolled 218 new
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, with 58% male and 42% female. By 1958, enrollments rose to 1,046, with males still the majority at 68%. In 2008, the number surged to 6,377, and the gender balance shifted, with 54% female and 46% male
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. The percentage of
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 from within 30 miles of Bristol dropped from 50% in 1928 to 14% in 1958, reaching only 1 to 2% by 2008. Meanwhile, international enrollment grew significantly, from 5% representing three countries in 1928 to 28% representing 98 countries in 2008, showing the university’s increasing global appeal.
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, the data highlights Bristol University’s growth, greater gender balance, decline in local
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, and increased international diversity.

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