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The line graph shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Describe the information shown in the graph.

The line graph shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Describe the information shown in the graph.
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The line graph illustrates how many Australian teenagers consumed fast food which is divided into three types consisting of
Hamburgers
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,
Pizzas
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 and Fish & Chips between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
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,it can be seen that both
Pizzas
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 and
Hamburgers
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 had upward trends
whereas
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 Fish & Chips consumption decreased.
To begin
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 with,
Pizzas
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 and
Hamburgers
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 had similar trends starting at the same point but with different rates of increase.
That is
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 to say,
Hamburgers
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 rose significantly from 10
times
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 eaten to 80
times
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 eaten in a decade.After that year,they gradually increased to peak at 100
times
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 eaten and stayed constant.
While
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Pizzas
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 had a slight upward trend in the first 15 years,accounting for 25
times
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 eaten
then
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 they exponentially climbed up to 80
times
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 eaten in the year 1998 which was lower than
Hamburgers
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.
On the other hand
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,Fish & Chips had a reversed trend,beginning at the highest number of eaten which was 100 timed eaten.After that,they declined to reach the lowest number at 50
times
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 eaten in the year 2000 with some fluctuations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, pizzas, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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