Essay topics: In some countries, more and more adults are living with their parents after graduating from college , University or even after finding a job. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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Family plays
crucial
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role in
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physical, mental and emotional growth. Living with family has been popularized during the
last
decades. In many countries, more than 50
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per cent
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likes to live with their parents after passing maturity age.
This
situation has both merits and demerits but definitely the merits outweigh the demerits. In the following paragraphs, I
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put forth my arguments to support my views. There are
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of positive
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. First and foremost is;
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always provide
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physical
, mental and emotional support which is helpful for
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growth.
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, family can save their child
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part of
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loneliness
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this
age they get frequently good and
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and
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they can be a part of depression too. And,
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last
but not least, living with the family drives
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the child
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child
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to their culture which will live in their family
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roots
till decades. For
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if family celebrate their festival and worship their god they will definitely do
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, living with family always
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boon for the children. Undoubtedly, the given statement
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bulk
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amount of favourable effects, but we should not avoid their other sides too. The most worrying aspect is dependant.
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children get more protection from the
parents
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side
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that
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they can not
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by
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.
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danger
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effect is after graduating from college and university children have
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of
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better
job
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in their
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. During
this
time they get positive and negative responses so that
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they feel alone and at that time parents play
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role in their life. To reiterate, both sides have their own positive and negative
outcomes
but, positive
outcomes
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the negative
outcomes
. living with family is
best
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part of
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life which we should enjoy. But, we should not neglect
othersides
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other sides
other sites
too.
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You demonstrate a good understanding of the topic by identifying both advantages and disadvantages.
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The main points about family support and cultural continuity are well articulated.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boomerang generation
  • financial security
  • mutual dependence
  • nurturing environment
  • multi-generational households
  • intergenerational bonding
  • cultural heritage
  • autonomy
  • interpersonal conflicts
  • social norms
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