You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

Dear Zachary, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I just wanted to take a moment to express my heartfelt thanks for coming to my birthday party. I really
appericate
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appreciate
the gift you gave me on my birthday. When I saw the
apple
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watch inside the box, I was over the moon. I was thinking
to get
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of getting
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the watch. As you know working with children, I
regurally
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regularly
really
need to monitor them time by time. So I need
this
watch not only for my work purpose but
also
beacause
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because
of
this
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its
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numerous functions. Now, I can get phone
call
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on my watch and it can track my daily activities. I was saving money to buy
this
watch because
this
is so costly. I'm so
greatful
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grateful
that you
spend
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this
much money
for
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on
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me. I'm lucky to have a friend like you in my life. Why
not
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don't
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we catch up again for dinner next week
.
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We can hang out and spend time with each other like old days. Looking forward to
see
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seeing
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you again. Until
then
, take care and thank you again for everything. Warm Regards, xxx
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task achievement
Be mindful of small spelling errors such as 'appericate' (appreciate) and 'regurally' (regularly).
coherence cohesion
Try to vary sentence structures to enhance flow and engage the reader more.
task achievement
The letter maintains a warm and friendly tone throughout, appropriate for the context of thanking a friend.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph clearly focuses on one aspect of the task, such as thanking, explaining the gift's usefulness, and making plans.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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