what are the two main reasons that Saudi people go on holiday overseas? write a short four paragraph essay. write about 250 words.

A recent study showed that more than one million
Saudi
people
travel
abroad every year to spend a few days
enjoing
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enjoying
on
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their holidays. They
travel
to visit the places which have cold
weather
with
beutifule
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beautiful
nature
. In the summer season, the temperature in
Saudi
Arabia
at
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in
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some cities
reachs
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reaches
50 ,so many
people
who
lived
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there are looking
about
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locations which cold as soon as they get a vacation at
this
time. Cold
weather
makes them comfortable and allows them to go out during the day to shop, exercise or whatever they want which is impossible if they are in their country.
In addition
,
Saudi
country has a dry, rainless climate ,so many of them
travel
abroad to
looking
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about
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places which
has
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have
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rainy
weather
.
Although
there are cities in
Saudi
which have rainy
weather
,
Saudi
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Saudis
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do not prefer it because it gets very
crowed
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crowded
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on rainy days and its rain is not
continuos
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continuous
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.
As a result
, they
travel
to places which
has
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have
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rainfull
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rainfall
rain full
forcast
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forecast
. The second reason is the
nature
views which
not
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available in
Saudi
Arabia.
Saudi
people
think that
nature
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natural
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views are
kind
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a kind
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of visual therapy for feeling, which treats
pschological
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psychological
stress. Some
Saudi
tourists prefer camping in
nature
forests that are
laking
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lacking
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in
the
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Saudi
's
nature
. Waterfall, boat trips across
valls
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villages
, watching cows graze on green areas, standing next to wild animals as they eat their prey, and feeding domesticated animals are all factors that attract
Saudi
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Saudis
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to spend their holiday abroad. In summary, beautiful
nature
and nice
weather
are the most important reasons that make
Saudi
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Saudis
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thrilled to
travel
abroad. Many
Saudi
people
go on holiday overseas because
thay
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they
want to experience a different climate
that is
cooler than their country and it has
green
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a green
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nature
with a nice view.
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Ensure to proofread your essay to catch and correct minor spelling errors such as 'beutifule', 'reachs', 'crowed', 'continuos', etc.
coherence
Work on developing your sentences with varied structures for a more engaging writing style. This will enhance the flow of your ideas.
structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, outlining the main reasons Saudi people travel abroad effectively.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples concerning climate and nature that support your main points well.

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