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Many people live in towns and cities where there are museums that promote historical and artistic objects of cultural importance, but they don't visit them. Why do you think many people don't visit museums? What is the cultural importance of museums to society?

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To get a promotion in the workplace, workers do their best every single day.
This
 is given to only those individuals who deserve it. So, these days it has become a debatable issue .
Thus
, a few folks assume that it should be given to long-term employees.
However
, I totally disagree with
this
 statement
due to
 some reasonable points which will be discussed as follows.
Initially
, no doubt,
labour
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 who
has
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 been running the firms for a long time
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 the right to get achievements first because their dedication is more than newcomers or short-term workers. But, owners of companies should look at their tasks, achievements, and feedback towards the job. Only these skills can decide who needs a higher position.
Secondly
, we can not ignore the experience of older staff but, some individuals are well qualified with appropriate certificates and other achievements
instead
 of work experience which would increase the economy and name of the business.
Then
, definitely, employers should give them preference.
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
Use clear transitions between your main points to ensure logical flow.
relevant specific examples
Support your arguments with specific examples to illustrate your points more clearly.
complete response
The essay presents a clear disagreement with the statement, providing a structured argument.
clear comprehensive ideas
You provide reasons why promotions should be based on skills and qualifications, not just tenure.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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