Many people believe that cycling is a healthy and environmentally friendly mode of transport. However, it is still unpopular in many countries. What are the reasons? What could be done to encourage the use of bicycles among wider population?

Most
people
believe that cycling is a good source of keeping oneself physically fit and
also
is eco-friendly, but it is uncommon in several countries. Cycling has become an old version of
transportation
in the current hustle and bustle of traffic. To encourage the
use
of it, cycling should be reintroduced by developing more ideas which will be discussed
further
. Previously, the
use
of bicycles was highly encouraged by its significance for
health
,
however
, it is not highly recognized and adopted by many
people
worldwide under many advancements and developed
transportation
system
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.
On
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the first place,
cycles
have been
very
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good source of maintaining
health
issues
such
as cholesterol and sugar levels, blood pressure, and blood clots. It is
also
the cheapest transport vehicle because it does not
use
any fuel
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makes it eco-friendly and does not harm the
environment
by making noise pollution. To exemplify the environmentally friendly reason, Japan is a good example of
this
because most
the
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Japanese
people
are highly encouraged to walk on foot or to
use
bicycles to keep themselves healthy, fit, and the
environment
clean.
On the contrary
, the
use
of it has
been
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decreased, almost diminished, in the current advanced
transportation
system, because
people
are more likely to
use
faster vehicles to reach their destinations
such
as trains, buses,
airplanes
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, and bikes. For
this
purpose, they have just sidelined
benefits
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of
cycles
because it is slow in speed and make
people
late to reach their destinations.
Therefore
, they have replaced
this
source with faster ones. After realising the significance of
cycles
for
transportation
, various measures should be taken by the government and private citizens, including different non-governmental organizations to organize seminars
,
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and address major issues of
health
and
environment
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.
Moreover
,
government
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may impose high taxes on fuel to make
people
to
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use
lesser
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fuel-based vehicles,
similarly
, it will prevent
environment
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to be
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polluted by
the
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polluters.
Furthermore
, different job holders should
also
be encouraged by their employers to
use
cycles
and
can
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get
feasible
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time to reach
office
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. In
such
a way, they can be encouraged to replace their
transportation
means. In conclusion,
cycles
should be promoted for both
health
and
the
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environment
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wellness. For
this
purpose, every institute, including the government and private sectors should promote the idea to prevent
people
and the
environment
from diseases and disasters.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear single focus or idea and supports it with detailed evidence. Consider linking the ideas more effectively to create a smoother flow.
Task Achievement
Expand on the suggestions for encouraging cycling with more innovative and varied ideas, while ensuring each point is directly related to the topic question.
Coherence & Cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion that adequately frame the discussion and re-emphasize the importance of the topic.
Task Achievement
You provided a relevant example of Japan, which effectively supports the argument regarding the environmental benefits of cycling.

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