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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea. Some people think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times,
plastic
 shopping
bags
 have been identified as a key contributor to the pollution of land and sea areas. It has been argued that banning the usage of
plastic
bags
 would be an appropriate answer to
this
 issue.
Although
plastic
 shopping
bags
 are quite useful for both consumers
as well as
 retailers, I am of the opinion that restricting the
use
 of
plastic
bags
 would be
an
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 ultimate step to save our environment. There are a number of advantages associated with the
use
 of
plastic
 shopping
bags
.
Firstly
,
plastic
bags
 are really cheap.
While
 the manufacturer
need
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 to spend less money
in
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on
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 the production of
plastic
bags
, general people can get them at a reasonable price.
For instance
, compared to the
bags
 made of other biodegradable materials
such
 as paper or jute,
plastic
bags
 cost 25% less to be manufactured.
Secondly
,
durability
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the durability
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 of
plastic
bags
are
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 better than paper
bags
. These
bags
 are less prone to wear and tear,
re-usable
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reusable
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 and quite useful in the rain.
However
, there are significant drawbacks associated with the
use
 of
plastic
 shopping
bags
. First of all, as these
plastic
bags
 are not biodegradable, they remain unchanged for
thousand
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 of years in the soil. These
plastic
bags
 are releasing toxic chemicals in the soil which is increasing the acidity of the soil resulting
decreased
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in decreased
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 amount of yield of crops.
In addition
,
dumping
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the dumping
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 of thousands of tons of
plastic
 material in the sea as waste
product
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products
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, severely
compromising
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the
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apply
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marine life. Different types of aquatic animals are suffering badly
due to
 the pollution caused by
plastic
bags
 and other materials. In conclusion,
while
use
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the use
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 of
plastic
bags
are
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is
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 quite
user friendly
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 and affordable, I believe the pollution caused by these
bags
are
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is
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 far more serious and should be banned as soon as possible.
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task achievement
Consider expanding on the first argument about plastic bags being useful, adding more depth to the reasoning.
task achievement
Try to further elaborate on "why" the advantages do not outweigh the environmental concerns in the conclusion, thus making the argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a more seamless transition between points by using more connectors such as 'moreover' or 'furthermore'.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Presents a balanced view by acknowledging both the advantages and disadvantages of plastic bags.
task achievement
Provides clear and relevant examples to support the points, like the manufacturing cost of plastic vs. other materials.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • detrimental
  • non-biodegradable
  • pollution
  • biodegradable
  • sustainable
  • mitigate
  • ecosystem
  • recycling
  • reusable
  • environmental impact
  • eco-friendly
  • implementation
  • convenient alternatives
  • enforcement
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