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Write a letter expressing your interest in a job in a different country. Write to a job recruiter. Your letter should include: •Why you want to work abroad •What type of job you want to have •Questions about working abroad

#interest #job #country #recruiter #•why #work #•what #type #•questions
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Dear Job Recruiter, I am writing to the context to tell you that I am enthralled to apply for
getting
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employment overseas. First of all, I am an aspirant
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 getting jobs outside my native country so that I can not only bring
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 to my native country but can
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 grow myself in the
foriegn
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foreign
 environment and can gain more knowledge. Since
,
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 working in a distinct country will provide me with various skills and
abilties
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abilities
 for the future.
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, I did
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 in business management
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 I am looking to join any trade company where I can use my study and education. Plus I do have experience
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working as a Chief Operating Officer for 5 years in an
Indian based
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 company.
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, I have some places and jobs in mind that I would like to share with you but before working on these with you I want to clear
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 queries that I have. Like, "How much
estimately
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will
 it
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cost me?" ,"
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 I bring my family with me" and
how
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 much pay and benefits I can have
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 working abroad? I hope you can answer my questions as soon as possible and I will appreciate each and every help in
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 matter. Regards Soojana
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coherence cohesion
The letter should be structured more logically, with a clear introduction outlining the main purpose, followed by well-organized paragraphs detailing each point.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph contains a single idea. For instance, separate the discussion of your qualifications from the discussion of your questions.
task achievement
Expand on why you specifically want to work abroad and how it relates to your long-term career goals. This will enhance your response and engagement with the task.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and enthusiastic, which is suitable for a letter of interest to a job recruiter.
coherence cohesion
The closing is appropriate and maintains a professional tone, ending with anticipation of further communication.
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