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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below depicts the amount of
films
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 produced
in
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between the period 2007 and 2009 by 5
countries
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. The
years
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 are
color coded
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 green, blue, and yellow respectively.
Overall
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,
Country
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 A has the most movies released, with figures staying above 75 in all three
years
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.
Furthermore
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, the
last
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 3
countries
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 have varied trends but
consistenly
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consistently
 have numbers under 25 from 2007 to 2009. In the first two
years
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,
country
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 A had
equal
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 amount of
films
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 produced, with approximately 90
films
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 produced in both
years
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.
However
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, in 2009, it
experinced
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experienced
 a slight decrease but had significantly more released shows than the other
countries
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.
Similarly
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,
country
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 B had mirroring results of 50
films
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 in the first 2
years
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 but had a dramatic increase in 2009 with more than 50
films
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 released that year. Meanwhile, the
last
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 3
countries
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 have a marked gap in numbers from the first 2
countries
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. Despite
this
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 gap,
country
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 C has a steadily rising trend in the total of
films
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 it produces.
Moreover
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,
Country
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 D has a
fluctating
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fluctuating
 trend
while
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country
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 E has been consistent in numbers in the
last
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 3
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, countries, years, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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