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demonstrate
grange
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Grange Park
park
developed between 1920 and today.
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park
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for concerts Change the spelling
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the stage
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Grange Park
park
in 1920. There were 3 roses
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garden
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park
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was constructed
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the southeast
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park
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of stage
for musicians. Correct article usage
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rose garden
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instead
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rose Add an article
the new
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instead
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to
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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your essay into clear paragraphs for each main point. This will improve the logical flow and make your essay easier to follow. Try to ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to enhance coherence.
task response
Ensure that all changes in the park are mentioned clearly. Expand on some points, especially new features, and briefly compare them with the past features to highlight the evolution effectively.
task response
You provide a comprehensive overview of the changes between 1920 and today, encapsulating the main developments well.
task response
The essay covers most key areas of development in the park, ensuring a complete response.
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