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The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008- 2010 . Summarize the information by selecting and performing and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the aid from six developed countries to developing countries from 2008- 2010 . Summarize the information by selecting and performing and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Us
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2010 stood at the highest billion performing of aid
while
 Germany , the UK and Japan had similar figures with up and down.
However
, both countries,
Netherlands
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 and Sweden witnessed the lowest aid among
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 countries.
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