The bar chart below shows that number of tourists who travelled to Australia in 1995 and 2005 .The line graph shows the number of tourists who did two types of holiday.
The bar graph demonstrates data on how many tourists visited Australia between 1995 and 2005,
while
the line graph illustrates information about the number of visitors staying at resorts and backpacking in Australia during this
period.
Overall
,the number of tourists who visited Japan was dominant in 1995 and hit the lowest point by 2005,but this
figure
in the UK and the US remained the same in 2005 ,while
the trend of staying at resorts significantly declined . Conversely
,this
figure
in backpacking gradually increased between 1995 and 2005.
When it comes to the statistics of Japan, it started dominant at 1500000 in 1995, but this
statistics significantly decreased by 500000 in 2005 year and less popular. Conversely
, this
figure
in the UK , starting at 800000 in 1995, and this
figure
in the US starting at 500000 and bottom highest point in 1995 . Surprisingly , by 2005 year , the statistics of the UK and the US remained the same.
As regards the number of staying at resorts, it figure
significantly rose from 1500000 to 2.4 million between 1995 and 2000 years, but it
trend sharply declined by 1 million by 2005 . Change the pronoun
its
Conversely
, this
trend in backpacking gradually increased from 400000 to 1.1 million during this
period.Submitted by Who is the best? on
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