The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information about the intended length of stay of
immigrants
in the UK, from 2000 to 2008 and the pie chart illustrates the causes of movement in 2008.
Overall
, it is evident that the number of settlers who planned to stay for up to 2
years
and 2 to 4
years
experienced a gradual increase,
while
the figure for those intending to stay for 4 or more
years
remained relatively stable over the given period.
Furthermore
, the majority of
immigrants
traveled
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to the UK for work or study,
while
the smallest proportion stated no
reason
or gave another
reason
. Looking in more, the count of
immigrants
aiming to remain for 2 to 4
years
was almost 50k in 2000
,
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and changed gradually by 2006.
However
,
this
pattern for those
tend
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who tend
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to stay up to 2
years
commenced with approximately 150k in 2001, followed
a
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significant increase to 250k by 2004, and stabilized until the end of the period.
Additionally
, the number of
immigrants
who prefer
live
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2 to 4
years
observed a slight growth
by
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of
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about 100k.The number of
immigrants
intending to settle for 4 or more
years
started at around 150,000 in 2000 and fluctuated until 2008. Regarding the causes, work and study
was
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the most given
reason
, with 38% and 32%, respectively. Another obvious
reason
was
accompany
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and
join
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joining
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family almost 16%.
Morever
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Moreover
, the percentages of the other reasons and no reasons were almost the same, with 7%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words immigrants, years, reason, k with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immigrate
  • emigrate
  • migration
  • immigrant
  • intended length of stay
  • short-term stay
  • long-term stay
  • trends
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • primary reasons
  • comparative analysis
  • contributing factors
  • data interpretation
  • work-related migration
  • study-related migration
  • family reunification
  • asylum seeking
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