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Sone people think that newsapers are the best media to learn and get information from while others believe that the internet is a better source. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#sone #people #newsapers #media #information #internet #source
There are multiple resources to get information from.
Newspapers
 are
on
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 of them, old generation usually
perefers
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prefers
this
 type of resource because they are used to it. In general,
newspapers
 are daily published.
However
, several problems appear when using
the
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newspapers
.
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, they can easily
ripped
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rip
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 and
soaking
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 water. So,
numerous
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a numerous
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 number of people go to using
internet
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the internet
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. Using
Internet
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 to keep in touch with worldwide is less complex than newspaper. It has both advantages and disadvantages. One of the advantages is the information
is lasting
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for ever
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forever
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in
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on
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internet
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, so you can always find
what
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the old news
.
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is.
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While
,
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 the disadvantages are a lot one of them is people can face
a network issues
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network issues
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. In my view, both
newspapers
 and
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 are best for reaching out
to
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for
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the
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information.
Moreover
, it depends on someone's preference.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support each viewpoint regarding newspapers and the internet. This will strengthen your arguments and illustrate your points more vividly.
task achievement
Expand on your conclusion by restating the key points from both views and clearly stating your personal preference with reasons. This will give a stronger finish to your essay.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow by organizing your arguments more clearly. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that indicates the main idea of the paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Try connecting your ideas more effectively using linking words and phrases. This will enhance the logical progression and coherence of your essay.
coherence cohesion
You introduced the topic and presented both views. This gives a clear start to your essay and sets the stage for the discussion.
task achievement
You acknowledged both the advantages and disadvantages of using newspapers and the internet, which reflects a balanced discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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