You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The graphs below show the
ownership
of electrical appliances and amount of the
time
spent
during
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on
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housework
in
households
between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, since 1940, when the percentage of
households
with electrical appliances had increased rapidly, at the same
time
the number of
hours
of
housework
per week decreased. From 1920 to 1980, vacuum cleaner
ownership
had been increasing by 20% every 20 years and by 2000 over 100
percent
of owners had vacuum cleaners in their
home
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homes
show examples
. In 1920
fourty
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forty
percent
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per cent
show examples
of
households
had washing machines. After 40 years the percentage of washing machine owners increased by 30
percent
. By 1980 washing
machines
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machine
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ownership
was reduced to just under 63
percent
,after
bounced
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bouncing
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back to 70% by 2000. In comparison with other electrical
appliances
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appliances,
show examples
The percentage of
households
with refrigerators in 1920 was zero
percent
. From 1920 to 1980 refrigerators
ownership
had increased rapidly by 100% . Between 2000 to 2019 over 100% of
ownership
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owners
show examples
had vacuum cleaners and refrigerators in their home . At the same
time
just under
the
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apply
show examples
75
percent
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per cent
show examples
of
households
had washing machines. In 1920 the amount of
time
spent doing
housework
was 50
hours
per week . From 1940 to 1960
hours
of
housework
had been decreasing by 15
hours
every 20 years. By 1980 over 15
hours
was
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were
show examples
spent on
housework
. In 2000 the same amount of
time
spent
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was spent
show examples
doing
housework
and by 2019 only 10
hours
spent
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were spent
show examples
on
housework
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ownership, time, housework, households, hours, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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