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The maps illustrate the lsyout of the town between 2000 and 2009

The maps illustrate the lsyout of the town between 2000 and 2009
The two maps illustrate the layout of the town namely Lakeside in the years 2000 and 2009.
Overall
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, in early 2000 old town was located in the middle of the first picture and it was changed to
office
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an office
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 and
univercity
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university
 in 2009.
Shopping
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The shopping
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 centre was built
the
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on the
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 original site of
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the residental
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residental
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residential
 area which was situated in
southwest
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the southwest
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. It is known that
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period and north there was Derelic
Warchouse
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Warehouse
, by 2009 the new car park was constructed
the
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on the
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 main site
of
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apply
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it
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apply
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. In 2000 and
west art centre
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West Art Centre
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 was working,
by
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and by
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 the end of the period the building worked as a cinema. In 2009 two new buildings called office and
univercity
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university
 were opened in the original site of
old
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the old
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 town.
In
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At
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 the end of the
river
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river,
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 there was a lake and in 2009 it
was
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ended with
pond
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a pond
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. In the first year of the
period
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period,
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 we can see three
residental
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residential
 areas. During the time they were changed. The first building was positioned in the southeast corner
as well as
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 there was
industrial
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an industrial
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 complex next to it.
Industrial
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The industrial
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 complex was expanded so one of
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the
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residental
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residential
 areas was flattened. The second one was
eracted
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erected
 for
shopping
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a shopping
the shopping
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 centre. The
last
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 one
was remain
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remained
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 unchanged with
school
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the school
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 which was located in the middle.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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