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The charts below how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurents between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

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The bar chart illustrates the
percentages
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 of eating fast
food
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 in the USA in the years 2003 ,2006 and 2013.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
percentages
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 of eating fast
food
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 fluctuated over
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 period shown,
while
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 the most significant number of
people
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 went to a restaurant once a week or a few times a month, the lowest
percentages
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 of
people
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 never ate fast
food
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 or contrast, eating fast
food
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 in a daily routine.
to begin
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 with,
while
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 in the years 2003 and 2006 the highest
percentages
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 of
people
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 were interested in eating fast
food
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 once a week, in 2013 a huge number of
people
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 preferred to eat fast
food
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 once or twice a month.
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, the percentage of
people
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 who never eat fast
food
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 remained approximately steady over
this
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 time.
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,
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 several times a week reached 20% in 2006 and dropped dramatically to a bit of 15% in 2013. In 2006 and 2013 the percentage of
people
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 who went to restaurants a few times a year and ate fast
food
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 was 15% ,
however
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, in 2003, just nearly 12% ate fast
food
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, food, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • decade
  • trend analysis
  • frequently, occasionally, and rarely
  • significant changes
  • lifestyle modifications
  • health awareness
  • economic factors
  • public health implications
  • fast food industry
  • broader implications
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