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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and the planned future development of the site. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The two maps illustrate an industrial area in
the
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Norbiton town
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 and the expected transformations it should pass through in the future.
Overall
, all the factories are planned to be substituted by the houses for their future residents, with some new facilities,
such
 as shops, medical centre, playground and school for their comfortable lives.
It is clear that
 roads are planning to be expanded significantly for an optimal connection of all places. Focusing on industrial facilities, they are predicted to become a housing for citizens in the future, with a few objects built
instead
,
such
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 the end of the
road
 on the east, a playground just between the river and houses directly up the
road
 on the est. Moving to the central ring
road
, we can see a medical
center
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 which is planned to be situated just above another new ring
road
 on the south. On the opposite side of the
road
, could be found shops which are now one of the factories.
In addition
, we can see that two new roads are predicted to be paved west and north of the central ring
road
, with some houses along them.
As a result
, the farmland above the river will be reduced in size significantly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • future development
  • residential neighborhood
  • housing complexes
  • green spaces
  • parks and playgrounds
  • quality of life
  • amenities
  • self-sufficient community
  • main road
  • pedestrian walkways
  • cycling paths
  • alternative modes of transportation
  • connecting roads
  • new bridges
  • accessibility
  • transportation links
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