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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

It is
the
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 fact that rural
people
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, in many countries, migrate to
cities
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,
whereas
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 the population of the
village
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 drops down. I absolutely believe that
this
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 is a negative development as it leads to unemployment in the
village
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.
Cities
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 are
the
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apply
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places of big opportunities, which is the main reason for
this
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 migration. It is believed that most of the occupations with big salaries can be found, in these regions. And youngsters from
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countryside
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the countryside
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 move to
city
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the city
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 for educational purposes. They aspire to study in a college or university to work
on
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for
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 renowned companies
such
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 as Samsung, Apple, and Nike.
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,
cities
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 provide services, including health and car
insurances
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insurance
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, with technologies more advanced than villages.
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, it is
the
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a
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 fact that searching job related
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people’s
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interest
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interests
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 is a challenging task
that
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apply
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people
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 face. Sometimes,
such
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 companies may be strict on resumes reflecting self-abilities, skills, and experiences.
According to
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 some
adult’s
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adults’
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 experiences from some
occupation
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occupations
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,
people
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 barely receive big salaries unless promotions
be
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are
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 given to them.
Countryside
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 or villages are known as places
that
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where
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 individuals are able to have
piece
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peace
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 and enjoy the scenery and nature of the region.
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, the population of that area is decreasing, as its citizens are migrating to regions bigger than a
village
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 and
town
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towns
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. In
this
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 situation,
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countryside
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the countryside
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 experiences unemployment, because there will be no individuals working or holding a business there.
Also
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,
such
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 businesses provide essential needs for
people
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 around the world, especially
foods
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food
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, fruits, and clothes.
For instance
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, if no
people
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 work on
a
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apply
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farmland in a
village
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 or
a
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the
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countryside
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, fruits or meats cannot be exported to
cities
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. In conclusion,
best
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the best
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 opportunities can be either found in
a
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the
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countryside
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 or a city. As
cities
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 have jobs to provide services for individuals,
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countryside
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the countryside
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provide
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provides
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 critical and simple needs like
foods
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food
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.

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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more logically. Ensure each paragraph flows naturally to the next and each point you make builds on the previous one.
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Include more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your arguments. This will strengthen your essay and demonstrate a deeper level of analysis.
task achievement
Try to address all parts of the task more comprehensively, ensuring every aspect of the question is fully answered.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your argument effectively.
task achievement
Your essay acknowledges both positive aspects of urban migration and the negative impacts on rural areas, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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