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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
Nowadays,living in a foreign
country
 has become very common and popular but some
people
 that it
cause
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 many serious problems ,
also
 practical problems.certainly agree with
this
 view and in
this
 essay, I will support my idea with some examples. On the
on
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one
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 hand,first and
foremest
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foremost
,many
people
for
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to
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 have a comfortable life
deicde
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decide
 to
immigration
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immigrate
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 to abroad,
hence
,they don't use
mother
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their mother
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tounge
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tongue
 and they start to learn a foreign
languge
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language
,
additionally
,speaking a new language ,
particulary
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particularly
 for daily
introactions
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interactions
,has never been challenging.it can
be create
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 a
misscomminucation
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miscommunication
 with native individuals and it would be hard to find a friend because they will avoid to
conversation
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the conversation
a conversation
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 if they don't understand it.
for instance
:in daily
activites
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activities
such
 as purchasing food when you ask for some item to be bought,the seller will hardly grasp and understand their orders.
consequently
:the sellers often become
annoy
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 and
enrage
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cause
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because
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 they need
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to
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spend more time to
servies
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services
 to
customer
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customers
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.
On the other hand
 ,in the contemporary, experiencing
in
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apply
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life in
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foreign
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a foriegn
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foriegn
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foreign
country
have
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has
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 more benefits than disadvantages because they not only try a new speech ,yo
as well as
 a
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chance
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change
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chance
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 to visit a new culture,history and
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tradition
traditions
traditon
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tradition
.
for
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For
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 example:the researchers study about a group of
people
 who learn more than two languge addict to visit many historical places and get familiar with tradions in proportain a group of person who don't like to learn a foreign languge.
moreover
,the brains have understand faster than other peoples,
for example
:the students who go to another
country
 to study at university or work at a company a higher intelligence rather than other
people
 .
As a result
, sometimes living in countries with different cultures and speech has more cons than pros. In conclusion :
although
,living in a foreign
country
 it has complication social and practical problems but you can mange these difficulties and enjoy our life with the best occupation and high education oppporunities .
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coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your essay better. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your ideas flow logically from one to the next.
task achievement
Your response could be more comprehensive. Ensure that you fully address all parts of the question, using specific examples to support your points.
task achievement
Use more concrete examples and evidence that are relevant to your points to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You have identified some key issues and potential benefits related to living in a foreign country.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your response.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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