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The table shows the changes in modes of travel in a European country between 1995 and 2025. It also shows a projection to the year 2015.

The table shows the changes in modes of travel in a European country between 1995 and 2025. It also shows a projection to the year 2015.
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The supplied table indicates how the way of travelling changed in a European country over a ten-year period.
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, the graph illustrates a process in 2015. A glance at the graph reveals that the highest percentage of
changes
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 movements was for
bus
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the bus
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.
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, travelling by bicycle
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the
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had the lowest amount of
changes
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 over the period. In 1995, the
amount
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 of
changes
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 in modes of travel by bus was 56, (which was the highest proportion of alterations over the period), just ahead of
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2005
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 the percentage of change was 50.
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, the rate of
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 in
transportaion
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transportation
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 rail was 38 in 1995, as opposed to 2005 which was 48 in a European country.
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, the share of
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 travel by bicycle in 1995 was slightly the same as in 2005 at 2 and 1, respectively. (which was the lowest amount of
changes
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 over the whole year).
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, the level of
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 of modes in travel
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a
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rail was three times more than travelling
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 air in 2015 at 60 and 20, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Transportation preferences
  • Trends and shifts
  • Technological advancements
  • Urban policies
  • Substantial increase
  • Infrastructural developments
  • Projection
  • Environmental policies
  • Technological innovations
  • Electric vehicles
  • Smart public systems
  • Shared transportation
  • Transformation trends
  • Responsiveness
  • Transport policies
  • Sustainability aspects
  • Eco-friendly commute
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