The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum duringthe year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show theresult of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visitduring the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The provided table illustrates the numbers of
people
Correct pronoun usage
who visitied
visitied
to Ashdown Museum before the year renovated and the year after. The pie charts demonstrate how visitors were satisfied with their visit over the same 2 years.
Correct your spelling
visited
Overall
, it is vividly seen that very satisfied people
increased significantly, holding the second position after restoration. Unlikely, people
who did not like, saw a remarkable plunge and the number of humans "very dissatisfied" rose moderately, accounting to
the maximum amount.
Change preposition
for
To begin
with, in the year before uprade
, the fractions of dissatisfied and satisfied human beings were the highest among them, stabilising at 40 and 30 respectively. Correct your spelling
upgrade
Furthermore
, very satisfied and dissatisfied humans and the guys who did not answer the survey, differentiated
by 5 Add a missing verb
were differentiated
people
standing at 15, 10 and 5 correspondingly.
However
, after refurbishment, very dissatisfied human kinds went up to 40, being in the first position, while
the previous biggest one (dissatisfied) experienced a remarkable downward trend, falling to 15. Very satisfied surge
considerably to 35, Wrong verb form
surged
whereas
no response and very dissatisfied people
had the same level, being at 5.Submitted by novruzluahmed2007 on
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