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Once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development To what extent do you agree or disagree? 250 WORD

#children #school #teachers #influence #parents #development #word
According to
 my comprehension, it is impossible to ignore the impact of both teachers and
parents
for
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 developing a
child
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child's
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 analytical ability, and social
moral
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morals
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 due
child
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child's
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closely
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 absorb and listen their sayings
as well as
curious
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 about
elders
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elders'
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view
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views
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 on
this
 world. First and foremost, the home is
stepping
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a stepping
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 stone of a
babies
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baby's
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 growth where they receive a preliminary education.
Parents
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Parents'
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 upbringing highly
influenced
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influences
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child’s
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a child’s
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 mind
for instance
,
child’s
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a child’s
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 moral value
is highly depends
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highly depends
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 on the mother’s education. Generally, children from educated
family
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families
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 have
better
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a better
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 focus on studies
as well as
better
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a better
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 understanding
on
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 discipline, good manners and time management.
However
, working
parents
 can’t give proper time to the children;
thus
 improving
child
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a child
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(s) intellectual ability is quite difficult for them and have to highly depend on
the
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institual
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institute
initial
instinctual
 education. In
additionaly
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addition
, social
bond
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bonds
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 are reduced in today’s world. In educational institutes, a
child
meet
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 new people who have different qualities and
understaning
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understanding
. As most of the students have similar
age
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,
so
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their behaviour is equally
impactly
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impact
impacted
. So, it is significant for
a educations
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education
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 to promote good values and punish the naughty student.
Thus
, good
student
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students
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don’t
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 impacted by them.
On the other hand
, school is
major
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 platform where
student
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students
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 obtain knowledge from different types of people who
helps
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help
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 them in
prozining
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providing
 analytical
along with
 learning ability. Teachers are the backbone of
societies
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 development. In
other word
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,
educator
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educators
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 are
storage
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house
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houses
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 of knowledge, who constrain them
solving
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 problems in different
approach
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approaches
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 with each
methodelogy
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methodology
,
then
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 learning pattern is improved.
Although
, students
spends
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 most time with family members. They have
upper
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the upper
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 hand
of
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in
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child
evalution
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evaluation
evolution
. To cap it all, teachers and
parents
 are equally responsible for
the
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molding
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moulding
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 the
child
’s career and behaviour.
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task response
Clarify the main argument and align the points consistently with the stance. The essay seems to fluctuate between ideas without a clear, coherent argument about whether teachers or parents have more influence.
task response
Provide more specific examples to support your assertions. While you mention the roles of parents and teachers, examples are not very detailed or varied.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow by ensuring each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Consider using linking words or phrases to enhance cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Focus on developing a more structured introduction and conclusion that clearly restate and evaluate your position on the topic.
task response
The essay touches on the significant roles of both teachers and parents, demonstrating an understanding of the topic's complexity.
coherence cohesion
There is a good attempt to explain how both home and school environments influence children's development.
task response
The language choice shows a good range of vocabulary necessary to discuss the topic, even if it wasn't always used accurately.

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