The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The provided maps demonstrate various changes that occurred in Grange

Park

between 1920 and today. In brief, it is evident that the

park

underwent multiple, fundamental changes. These transformations include but are not limited to: the construction of an amphitheatre for concerts, a children’s play area and a cafe.

Additionally

, a

water

feature was created. The most significant changes include

such

things as a total removal of the fountain in the very centre and the building of a rose garden in its place with seats on each site. The next principal change is the building of the Amphitheatre on the western side of Grange

Park

. Previously, there was a stage for musicians, which no longer exists.

Furthermore

, a

water

feature was created on the south-eastern side of the

park

, where a glasshouse was located in the previous century.

Additionally

, near the

water

feature is now a brand-new children’s playground and a cafe. Back in 1920, there was a pond for

water

plants and a rose garden.

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The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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You recently went to see a good play at a theatre, but you did not enjoy it because of some problems in the theatre. Write a letter to the manager of the theatre. In your letter: say which play you saw and when describe the problems you experienced in the theatre suggest what the manager should do

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