The homeless population is growing in many cities around the world. What is the cause of this? What can be done to help this growing problem?
Around the entire world, the community of homeless increasing in a noticeable way. In
this
essay, I will discuss the primary reason, which is the
heavily relied upon Change the article
apply
robots
,
and will provide a viable solution to resolve the Remove the comma
apply
problem
.
To begin
with
the main Add a comma
with,
problem
causing homelessness
crisis is the lack of jobs, since the recent world depends on Correct article usage
the homelessness
robots
doing humans
' work to ruduce
salaries and for Correct your spelling
reduce
a better and faster outcomes
. Correct the article-noun agreement
better and faster outcomes
a better and faster outcome
consequently
, individuals hardly find jobs
opportunities to earn money, and the Change the noun form
job
inapility
to make money leads to Correct your spelling
inability
ability
Correct article usage
an individuals
individuals
housing crisis, which Change noun form
individual's
mean
Change the verb form
means
Correct article usage
the insbility
insbility
to find food, medicine or important needs for every individual. Correct your spelling
inability
instability
For instance
, sewing
job that its earnings can provide food for a poor unemployed Correct article usage
a sewing
indivdual
.
To Correct your spelling
individual
individuals
slove
Correct your spelling
solve
this
problem
, the government should prevent the
Correct article usage
apply
robots
production to make people take their rights, as the main reason Fix the agreement mistake
robot
of
working is to enhance Change preposition
for
humans
' lives. No robots
working means that the world achieving the goal they were created for, which is every
human Change preposition
for every
live
Fix the infinitive
to live
the
normal life without any suffering from strange creatures. Correct article usage
a
For example
. a waiter job can survive
a homeless person from many Verb problem
save
problem
Change to a plural noun
problems
instead
of giving no benefits fo
a robot.
In conclusion, the homelessness Correct your spelling
to
prooblem
Correct your spelling
problem
have
a direct Correct subject-verb agreement
has
relashionship
with the Correct your spelling
relationship
using
of Replace the word
use
robots
because of the number of jobs that took by robots
instead
of humans
. However
, to adress
Correct your spelling
address
this
problem
, the government should enforce stricter laws and advocate about
Change preposition
for
humans
lives.Fix the agreement mistake
human
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