The homeless population is growing in many cities around the world. What is the cause of this? What can be done to help this growing problem?

Around the entire world, the community of homeless increasing in a noticeable way. In
this
essay, I will discuss the primary reason, which is
the
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heavily relied upon
robots
,
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and will provide a viable solution to resolve the
problem
.
To begin
with
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the main
problem
causing
homelessness
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the homelessness
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crisis is the lack of jobs, since the recent world depends on
robots
doing
humans
' work to
ruduce
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reduce
salaries and for
a better and faster outcomes
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better and faster outcomes
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.
consequently
, individuals hardly find
jobs
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opportunities to earn money, and the
inapility
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inability
ability
to make money leads to
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an individuals
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individuals
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housing crisis, which
mean
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the insbility
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insbility
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inability
instability
to find food, medicine or important needs for every individual.
For instance
,
sewing
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a sewing
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job that its earnings can provide food for a poor unemployed
indivdual
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individual
individuals
. To
slove
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solve
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this
problem
, the government should prevent
the
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robots
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production to make people take their rights, as the main reason
of
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working is to enhance
humans
' lives. No
robots
working means that the world achieving the goal they were created for, which is
every
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human
live
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the
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normal life without any suffering from strange creatures.
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. a waiter job can
survive
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a homeless person from many
problem
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instead
of giving no benefits
fo
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to
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a robot. In conclusion, the homelessness
prooblem
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problem
have
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a direct
relashionship
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relationship
with the
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of
robots
because of the number of jobs that took by
robots
instead
of
humans
.
However
, to
adress
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address
this
problem
, the government should enforce stricter laws and advocate
about
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humans
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lives.
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