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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebreting New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter say how important Nwe Year is to people in your country describe how New Year is celebrated in your country explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Mark, I am writing to express my desire to talk about celebrating New
Year
 in our
country
. I think that you would be interested to hear from me. In my
country
, celebrating the New
Year
 is important to some people because Israel has different cultures. Even though many people moved from post-soviet countries.
Therefore
 it is important to celebrate the New
Year
. In our
country
, before, how to celebrate decorating the Christmas tree, making different food, inviting guests, and putting presents under the Christmas tree, make a wish at 12 o'clock. I like
this
 holiday because it is very happy. I would be glad if you could visit with me during the New
Year
 in my
country
.
Then
 you would understand and feel how our people celebrate and would have seen all
traditions
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. So I
to
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do
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 try I'm looking forward to seeing you. See you
at
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on
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the
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holiday. Best regards, Artem
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Task Achievement
Consider expanding on the diversity of modern Israeli New Year celebrations such as highlighting regional differences or providing more detail on how these celebrations differ from traditional ones.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a single clear idea, as they feel slightly blended in some parts. For example, separate the explanation of the importance of the New Year and the description of how it is celebrated into two distinct paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are done very well, creating a friendly and personal tone that is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
Task Achievement
The letter covers all the points requested in the task, clearly describing the importance of the New Year and explaining how it is celebrated.
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