The cost of air travel has fallen in recent years. Do you believe this is a positive or negative development? To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.

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In the modern era , with the advancement in technology in travelling many
people
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these days
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by
air
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and more over
cost
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the cost
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of
travel
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is
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recorded
lower as
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compare
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wholeheartedly
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trend helps in
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in
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many reasons. In the upcoming paragraphs,
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essay delve deeper into
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development. To commence with. Let us shed some light
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the benefits of
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travel
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. First and foremost, when an individual travelling by
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it helps not only the person to save time but
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energy and with the ease of lower fees in
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air
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travelling more
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choose to
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by
air
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instead
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of private vehicles. To cite an example,research conducted by
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of British
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year 2012 asserted that about 10% of
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increased in travelling by
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because of
cost cutting
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implemented by
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companies .
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, more
people
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save their time and money with
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trend.
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more
people
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to
fullfill
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fulfil
their dreams
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of travelling
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travel
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by
planes
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.To elaborate more,
as
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these days inflation is very high so most
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people
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the people
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not
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able to
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fulfil
their basic needs
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as food and housing .
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, when
airlines company
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airline companies
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reduce their prices middle class and
underprivelege
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underprivileged
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get
chance
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a chance
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to
travel
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by
air
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.
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,
this
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reduced cutting in
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travelling helps
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poor
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to commute by
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. To
recaptiluate
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recapitulate
, it can be asserted that
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trend has many
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to
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the
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society.Just because of
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development
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development,
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it helps
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to save time and money but
also
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fullfill
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fulfil
their dreams
to
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of travelling
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travel
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by
air
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Task Response
Aim for more precise vocabulary and better sentence structures to enhance clarity. Avoid repetition of ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to improve cohesion between sentences and paragraphs.
Introduction and Conclusion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize the main ideas appropriately.
Supported Main Points
Main points are generally supported with examples and explanation.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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