The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015. (million students). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
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students
pursuing their studies in two European countries and Use synonyms
America
from 2000 to 2015.
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Overall
, France and Russia Linking Words
being
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are
highest
countries that Correct word choice
apply
has
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have
a
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a Vietnamese student
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students
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studied in
there, and Wrong verb form
studying
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being
the lowestChange the form of the verb
is
one
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, Linking Words
at the end
of the period, Linking Words
America
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being
the Wrong verb form
was
most
country Correct quantifier usage
apply
for
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with
having
Unnecessary verb
apply
a
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a Vietnamese student
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students
.
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students
studied in France and Russia stood at 3 Use synonyms
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millions
and 3.5 Change to singular
million
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millions
, respectively. 2010 saw a decrease in the number of Change to singular
million
students
(around 1 Use synonyms
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millions
falls). Despite Change to a singular noun
million
of
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decreased
in 2010, the next 5 years showed a significant increase Replace the word
decrease
of
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in
students
, Use synonyms
reached
4.5 Wrong verb form
reaching
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millions
in France and 2.5 Change to singular
million
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millions
in Russia Change to singular
million
at the end
of the period.
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On the other hand
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although
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America
had the lowest number of Use synonyms
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students
in 2000 (Use synonyms
which
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apply
only
1.5 Add a missing verb
was only
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millions
) for the next 15 years, Change to singular
million
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gave
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had
a
highest number of Change the article
the
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students
among the two other countries. There was a sudden increase, reaching 5 Use synonyms
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millions
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million
students
in 2015.Use synonyms
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