Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To What extent do you agree or disagree?
Taking care of
children
is one of the most important tasks in our country. If parents
take a course
about how to bring up children
, they’ll be more qualified.
Raising children
is the hardest and most important thing in life. Although
today children
are really independent and most parents
tend to take a course
that teaches them to be good parents
. For example
: If parents
do not know how to raise and communicate with their children
,it can bad impact on their future, therefore
it is a great way to study child psychology and get useful data about children
. Afterwards, they may bring up their children
much more easily.
Some parents
do not have any time
to go to courses, because of their jobs. When they go courses they can not earn money and help their family financially. They think going on a course
is a waste of money and time
, they prefer to care for their children
by themselves. Such
as they tend to spend much more time
with their children
, communicate
with them to know about their feelings by themselves , rather than attend some kind of Correct word choice
and communicate
course
. Then
they may watch or read some kind of book about raising children
. After that
they can save their moneyAdd a comma
that,
,
and Remove the comma
apply
time
and they can give a good upbringing to their children
.
In conclusion, in this
essay, I wrote about courses for parents
to learn how to bring up their children
. In my opinion, the best way to raise children
is by their parents
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