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Task 1 The table below gives information on households with a regular use of a car in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.

Task 1 The table below gives information on households with a regular use of a car in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.
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The table shows
about
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Great Britain's
households
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use
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used
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a
car
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 on
regular
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a regular
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 basis in the years 1971 to 2007.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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car
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 ownership per
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households
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household
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 in England increased throughout the
period
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. In
particularly
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,
while
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no
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the
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one
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apply
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car
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 families rate declined, Two
cars
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car
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households
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 rose. In 1971, the
one
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one-car
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car
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 families stood at around 44
percentage
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. There
was
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 a few fluctuations during the
period
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 , reaching approximately 43% in 2007. Great Britain's per
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households
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household
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 without a
car
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 was the highest point at the beginning of the
period
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.
This
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 figure ,
however
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, decreased steadily and
reaching
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 about 25 % in 2007.
Two-cars
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The two-cars
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families rate levelled
of
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at
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 around 8
percentage
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per cent
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 in 1971 ,
then
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 it rose significantly to 18% in 2007. The percentage of three or more
cars
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car
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households
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 was around 5 % at the beginning, and
then
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this
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 category
was seen
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saw
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 a noticeable change over the
period
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 and
reaching
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reached
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 around 7 %
at the end
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 of the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, car, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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