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Some people believe that it is parents who teach children to recycle waste. While others feel schools are more responsible. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#people #parents #children #waste #schools
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Nowdays
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waste
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 is becoming a serious problem to tackle with. Since lands, water bodies and other places around the world are getting filled with garbage because most
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the
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people do not have
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knowledge of it
hence
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 the
waste
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 ends up in the oceans and
land fills
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landfills
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.
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, various people debate who is more responsible
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for educating
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yougsters
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youngsters
, the future of
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the planet
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, about recycling
waste
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, the
parents
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 or the institutions. Before stating my point, I want to highlight
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 of
parents
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 and institutions in teaching how to convert something from reclaimable items.
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,
parents
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 can play a pivotal role in assisting young ones in developing
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 habits. Since they stay home more than anywhere in earlier years.
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, they remember everything adults do and follow in future. If
parents
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shows
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 the necessity of reclaiming garbage items in their learning years, there are chances that they will be more careful about it in the upcoming days.
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, if
carer
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 can keep separate
conatiner
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container
containers
 for things that need to be recycled and start doing so.
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,
children
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 will see and
will
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try to imitate the adults.
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, Educational places can have an
ambiance
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 and
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rules which can motivate
children
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 to be considerate of
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waste
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 that can be reprocessed rather than
puting
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putting
 into
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the normal
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 bin.
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, posters and some handouts should be pasted on the walls to remind them
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 importance and purpose.
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, in a daycare, where I work as an ECE Assistant,
children
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 who are under 5 are persuaded at their best to put
yougurt
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yoghurt
 bottles, plastic cups and many other things into the blue bins for the
envoirmental
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environmental
 cause.
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, learning at home or at
schools
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school
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 can help
children
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 learn the basic importance of recycling.
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, both are equally prime. Learning at schools and
practicing
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practising
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 at
homes
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home
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 can prove to be
really
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a really
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 beneficial
method
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methods
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 to get rid of
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unnecessary
unnecessarily
 products and save the planet.
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clarity
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structure
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea supported by well-developed examples. This will strengthen the main points of your essay.
balance
The essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument, discussing the roles of both parents and schools in teaching children to recycle.
examples
Specific examples are used effectively to illustrate points, such as the example of separating containers for recycling and the daycare experience.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are clearly defined, offering a good framework for the discussion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Primary source of moral guidance
  • Reinforce daily habits
  • Environmental responsibility
  • Setting a personal example
  • Personalized learning experience
  • Structured environment
  • Formal educational resources
  • Environmental impact
  • Facilitate recycling initiatives
  • Inculcating a culture
  • Practical recycling activities
  • Collaboration with community programs
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