Some people claim that many things that children are taught at school are a waste of time. Other people argue that everything that children study at school is useful at sometime. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

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necessary. Other people
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that all the subjects that children are
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useful. In
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both sides and give my own
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. I do not remember how many subjects I used to have at Primary
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I record It was really intense and
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year by year. The benefits of having diversified subjects
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just to learning maths or
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chemistry
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mental health ,
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children are so full of energy, and the parents need the
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Ensure to cover both perspectives on the topic thoroughly and present a balanced argument before stating your opinion.
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Develop more comprehensive ideas with specific examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on a clear and logical structure, ensuring all arguments are connected effectively.
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Include a conclusion to summarize your main points and reinforce your opinion.
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The introduction sets a good stage for discussing different viewpoints.
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The essay raises relevant points about the diversity of subjects contributing to mental and physical well-being.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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