People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in their neighborhood and this has a negative impact on community. What are the causes and solutions? ф

Nowadays,
people
spend less
time
interacting without other
people
like
neighbours
and
this
influence negatively impacts on community. The main
causes
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cause
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is that
after
this
more
people
lead to depression
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and become
to introvert
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and
scary
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communicate with
people
. The best solution is
open
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different activities lessons for
neighbours
and conduct them 1-2 a week to know better each other. The number of
people
who do not talk to each other increases year and year, and
that is
why
neighbours
are
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do not communicate. Most
people
like to
spending
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spend
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time
with
yourself
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themselves
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or they are just
introvert
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introverts
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and cannot start chatting right away.
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,
the
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human can be
extrovert
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extroverts
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but just
in
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depressed
some
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for some
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time
and
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that
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because they do not want to leave their home.
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example
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I do not communicate with my
neighbours
because I do not think it is necessary and
also
i
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I
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do not have
a
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time
for them. So every human has their own problem in their head and
mental
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mind
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. A solution
in
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to
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this
problem is just
open
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to open
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more activities or
community
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communities
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for
people
in one area. It is like
to go
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going
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to
the
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a
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restaurant with each other , spending
time
together, talking and just chilling.
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, just greet with
on
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one
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another. It can be
in
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outside
,
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when suddenly you see each other. Even if it just a little
actions
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action
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it can
be help
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help
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a lot for just starting
community
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a community
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.
For instance
, you can spend another event and just
shared
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share
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with
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your good mood,
feeling
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feelings
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,
emotions
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and emotions
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and just exchange
a
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good energy with each other. In conclusion, the most effective way to communicate with
neighbours
is just
talk
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to talk
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. If you contact
with
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neighbours
it can help avoid a big problem that happens in your area and decide it together.
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task response
Try to clearly explain the underlying causes of reduced neighborhood interactions. Currently, the reasons given are somewhat vague, like 'people becoming introverted' or 'depression.' It would be beneficial to provide more detailed, specific causes such as the impact of digital technology or urban lifestyle changes.
task response
Ensure that your solutions are directly related to the causes you mentioned. Right now, the solutions are provided but not strongly linked to the reasons why people aren't interacting. This will strengthen the response as it addresses the root causes.
coherence cohesion
Work on your paragraph structure to improve coherence. Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and flows logically from one idea to the next. Currently, ideas can feel a bit jumbled, such as in the second body paragraph.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps guide the reader through your essay.
task response
You've made a good attempt to provide examples in support of your points, such as suggesting activities like going to a restaurant to bolster community interaction.

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